Graeme Hewson wrote:
Ulf Lamping wrote:
We have version1.92 now...
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Title page: comma after Lamping
I tried to change this before, but it's a bug in the conversion stylesheets
page i: authors' names strung together in copyright notice
that's a bug in the conversion stylesheets, too
3.2 tip should be:
When starting Ethereal it's possible to specify optional settings using
the command line. See ...
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3.2 note: "different than" should be "different from". Last sentence
should be: "But as there are no real differences in functionality, these
screenshots should still be understandable."
changed both
3.3 tip should be: "... preference settings. See ..."
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3.4 note should be: "Menu items will be greyed out if the corresponding
feature isn't available. For example, you cannot save a capture file if
you didn't capture or load any data before."
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Descriptions under figure 3.2: run-on sentences. ", see" should be
". See".
Sorry, didn't found the place to change
"Each of these menu items are described" should be "Each of these menu
items is described".
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3.4 tip: remove comma from "and the K keys together, to open"
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Table 3.1:
Open Recent: remove comma in "Clicking on one of the submenu items, will
open"
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Close: mention the new preference setting not to display the
prompt?
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Export menu items: change "This menu item allows you to
export the (or some) of the packets" to "This menu item allows you to
export all, or some, of the packets".
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Export > Selected Packet Bytes: change "into a binary file" to "to a
binary file".
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Quit: remove comma in "capture file, if you haven't".
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Mention the new
preference setting not to display the prompt?
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Table 3.2:
Find Next and Find Previous: remove comma after "packet,"
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Mark Packet: run-on sentence. I suggest a semicolon instead of the
comma.
splitted the sentences
Table 3.3:
Coloring Rules: insert "to": "allows you to color packets"
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Go to Packet: I suggest: "This menu item brings up a dialog box that
allows you to specify a packet number, and then goes to that packet. See
Section...".
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Table 3.6:
Apply as Filter and Prepare a Filter: insert "to": "filter string will
be replaced or appended to by the selected protocol field"
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3.13: I suggest: "As in the menu, only the items useful in the current
program state will be available. The others will be greyed out (e.g. you
cannot save a capture file if you haven't loaded one)."
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Table 3.9:
Stop Capture: remove comma after "This icon is shown,"
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Other items: as menu.
What do you mean?
3.14: I suggest: "The background will turn red if you enter an
incomplete or invalid string, and will become green when you enter a
valid string. You can click on the pull down arrow to select a
previously-entered filter string from a list."
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3.14: Remove apostrophe in "let's you edit".
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3.15: "such as" would be preferable to "like" in "(like the Ethernet
addresses)" and "(like the IP addresses)".
don't get the point
End of same sentence: insert
comma before "and so on."
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3.15: I suggest: "Source The address this packet is coming from" and
"Destination The address this packet is going to".
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3.15: "(perhaps abbreviated)" is preferable to "(maybe abbreviated)".
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3.16: change to "The packet details pane shows the current packet
(selected in the "Packet List" pane) in a more detailed form."
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3.16 Generated fields: I suggest: "The information in these fields is
derived from the known context of other packets in the capture file."
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3.17: I suggest: "in the middle the packet data is shown in a
hexadecimal representation".
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3.17: remove comma in "bottom of the pane, to let you select the page
you want to see."
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3.17: remove comma in "This can be helpful, if the size in the pane"
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Figure 3.18: "the elapsed time while it was being captured."
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Regards, ULFL
