Graeme Hewson wrote:
Ulf Lamping wrote:
We have version1.92 now...
Please continue reviewing ...
OK, here are some comments.
General comment: Is there a way to prevent URLs from being split across
lines in the generated PDF? There are several examples of the text
going:
........... can be found at: ht-
tp://www.ethereal.com
I know what you mean, but I didn't found a way to manipulate this kind
of things (there are some other topics like this as well).
Foreword: suggest changing "an effort of the Ethereal team" to
"an effort by the Ethereal team".
changed
Preface 2: change "As Ethereal is becoming a very complex program since
the early days" to "As Ethereal has become a very complex program since
the early days" or simply, "As Ethereal is a very complex program".
changed
Preface 2: change "the advanced features that's maybe not that obvious"
to "the advanced features that are maybe not that obvious".
changed
Preface 3: insert "providing" before "funding to do this documentation".
that's from the former version, and I don't think that should be changed.
1.1.3 suggest: "Despite its name, Ethereal can capture traffic from
network media other than Ethernet."
changed
1.1.4 run-on sentence. "capture programs. For a list of input formats"
changed
1.1.5 run-on sentence. "For a list of output formats"
changed
1.1.6 run-on sentence. "for a great many protocols: see Appendix B"
changed
1.1.8 change "or doing other active things" to "or do other active
things"
changed
1.1.8 change "name resolutions" to "name resolution".
There will be multiple name resolutions in parallel, so this might be
correct.
1.5 paragraph 5: insert "and" before "started looking at it"
changed
1.5 paragraph 6: change "became" to "has become"
changed
1.7.1 change "Before sending any mails" to "Before sending any mail"
changed
1.7.1 remove comma in "keep in mind, that a lot of people"
are you sure?
1.7.1 remove comma in "You will find the FAQ inside Ethereal, by
clicking"
changed
1.7.2 ethereal-users: run-on sentence. change "Ethereal, others" to
"Ethereal; others"
are you sure?
1.7.2 Tip: change "You can search in the list archives, if someone" to
"You can search in the list archives to see if someone"
changed
1.7.3 suggest inserting "please" before "make sure"
I was so kind and changed it :-)
1.7.3 change "a lot of people on the list which are not related to your
specific problem" to "people on the list who are not interested in your
specific problem"
changed
1.7.4 change "(beside the information" to "(besides the information"
changed
1.7.4 "cut -f' ' -d2" should be "cut -d' ' -f2". Is there any particular
reason to use "whereis", though? Simpler would be "which", as in:
gdb `which ethereal` core >& bt.txt
This is from one of the former authors. I would think the whole unix
related section(s) has to be redesigned/updated.
Add note that the backtrace command won't be echoed.
added it to the backtrace note, please review
1.7.5 second sentence: "For this reason it's not possible to create a
meaningful backtrace file from a binary distribution."
partially changed
Appendix D: "This Documents" should be "This Document's".
changed
Regards, ULFL
